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LEGAL ISSUE

2007-07-29T17:43:00.000-07:00

Nothing much to describe here.
HOWEVER some important stuff I would like to relate

-This is ONLY a fanfiction heavily based off the Disneyland rides, for this case Phantom Manor, the european version of Haunted Mansion

-Phantom Manor electronic puppets are copyright of Disney ( I just gave them to life and added a majority of monsters and some characters into the story )

-This script is not supported or has been written by them

- You ain't allowed to copy any of these things/ideas you see here and post them somewhere else, considering it as 'yours' to gain profit

justice will strike at any moment, so you’ve been warned

Why I made this:

I once remember considering this house as one of the scariest things in my life.. not the ride itself.. but the magnificent portraits of Julie Svendsen, as a youngster I used to get a few nightmares in that elevator scene.. so yes, this is indeed more of a tribute to her marvellous work
Remember, stretch paintings belong to Julie Svendsen ONLY
morphing images are belong to Marc Davis ( who recently died )
The main house project belongs to Jeff Burke.

as I knew this had somewhat an unofficial storyline, ( very incomplete though ) so I've decided it was time to make a full animated feature of it
( http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Phantom_Manor )

This script belongs to xico, and you can always see my artwork at

http://www.xic0o.deviantart.com/

PHANTOM MANOR

2007-07-29T17:37:00.000-07:00

Come in.. Step in.. don’t be afraid, humble visitors..

Phantom Manor: The animated feature

Coming soon to theaters

DECEMBER 2009

WARNING

( Contains strong language and excessive violence which may offend some viewers )

CHAPTERS:

Scene 1 Prelude

Scene 2 Birth

Scene 3 Bizarre

Scene 4 Despair

Scene 5 Grotesque

Scene 6 Wrath

Scene 7 Death ( Finale )

SCENE 1: PRELUDE

2007-07-29T17:10:00.000-07:00

(Disney Logo)

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bat2djOzF8Q

You.. you who have dared disturbing our peaceful decaying world of ghoulish creatures....

Of course.. there’s always room for a curious soul such as yours.. ahaha

Perhaps.. you would rather listen to the melancholy tale…

About passion…

About despair…

Yes.. I’m afraid you’ve come to the right place… AHAHAHAHAHA

AAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRGHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

(A desperate voice is heard)

??? - Why… why do you do this to me...

??? - … Melanie ??

.................

We see a hand holding a little music box looking old and rush...

yet, it plays a beautiful and harmonic melody...

(Music Box Track)

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vPEejZFBPxY

A fan animated movie proudly presents

Ambition

2007-07-29T16:53:00.000-07:00

1838 – 22 years ago

Before tragedy came...

It was the age of goldrush.. where thousands of miners had ventured into the high mountains..

Seeking for their greatest achievement in which any individual would become abundantly rich.. wealthy

almost instantly!

they have certainly fought to proclaim it...

... searched in every single mine...

However....

Only few have succeeded their task...

Sir Henry Ravenswood..

made its fortune.

Henry (somehow nervous) – Oh my! Do my eyes... deceive me?

I found gold at last!

(he yells in joy)

Henry – ALL MINE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Little did he know...

he was being observed....

(a group of Native Americans, lidded by a sinister wizard have sensed someone disrupting their place)

Warrior – should we go kill him ?

Skull Wizard – No.. our god shall deliver him a much greater pain!

(The sky suddenly darkens)

Skull Wizard - 'Ye who causes lightning bolts and stirs the wind.. who creates storms as it flies'

'Ohh wrathful and wise one.. listen to your servant's pray...

LORD WAKINYAN I'm calling you!'

'Bring darkness and misfortune to those who have dared enter

in your private chamber and STOLE YOUR ROYAL TREASURY!'

(Wakinyan – thunderbird god)

(sarcastic)

Little did he know for sure... ahaha

Over years have passed since then...

Rise of Thunder Mesa

2007-07-29T16:01:00.000-07:00

(Scorpions - Wind of Change)

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rWAHF3c0c2g

00:00 to 01:29

Spring, 1840

(Henry Ravenswood, more wealthy than ever, travels on his riverboat with his wife, Mrs. Ravenswood who appears to be pregnant)

(a new city has been built along with a manor near the gold mines)

( the boat currently stops.. in front of a beautiful mansion )

Workers – MAYOR IS COMING!!!

( Henry has proclaimed himself as mayor )

As they exit the boat, the opulent couple decide to take a look inside their new ‘Victorian’ lair

Henry Ravenswood – Ah.. Our humble lair.. Ravenswood manor!

Mrs Ravenswood (fairly speechless) – oh Henry, it looks so gracious !

Henry Ravenswood – No... not as gracious as you are, darling

(She smiles)

Henry Ravenswood - will you look at the chandelier... they certainly did a terrific job

Ah...

(Sir Ravenswood opens a window with an entirely view of the city)

Henry ( ambitious ) – All belong to me......

Thunder Mesa itself became popular

Thousands of citizens, families, co-workers... have moved there, hoping to regain a miracle

But alas.. things aren’t exactly what they seem.....

SCENE 2: BIRTH

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In one particular night

July, 1840

6:00 o’clock

(We hear horrible.. painful screams......)

As we witness the birth of a child

voices – *ANYONE CAPABLE.. BRING HIM HERE !!!*

*Don’t you suffer my dear!*

*May I suggest.. ?!*

*HURRY !!!!*

(silence)

A new offspring was born.....

Doctor – ...Congratulations Mrs Ravenswood.. it’s a girl!!

Mrs – Ohhh my baby.... my sweet baby!

(cries)

Isn’t she a wonder ?

Maiden Jones – Her eyes are SO adorable miss...

Ohhh...

Henry – Yes.. quite indeed...

Mrs (whispering to the baby’s hear) – Hmmm what shall I call you pumpkin.. ? hmm?

...

Melanie.. ? I like Melanie!

Henry (interrupts) – Seems a wonderful idea my dear (laughs)

Mrs (laughing aswell) – Oh what kind of name would you prefer mister.. ? if you think that’s funny

Henry – May I suggest a…..

Mrs – mmm ?

Henry – Considering a more appropriate...

hum...

Victoria Ravenswood... ! That should do it !

Mrs – hm......Victoria... ? ...

(baby Melanie stares at him with her big round eyes looking frightened)

Henry – ....... *sighs*

Alright (that name)... Melanie! Melanie shall be it

Mrs Ravenswood (whispering) – Did you hear that Melanie ? good taste always triumphs (smiling at her husband)

Years were passing by.. and our little girl has been raised properly...

Receiving best manners...

frequenting best schools in town...

Basically, a wonderful youth.. or so it seemed...

Little Melanie had no friends...

Spring of 1859

Melanie (studying with her mother) – le plus grand obstacle à la vie est l'attente

qui espère demain et néglige aujourd'hui

Mrs – Magnificent pronounce!

Melanie – .....

Mrs – What is it ? there’s something wrong....

Melanie (feeling somehow tired) – Nothing mother... I think I just need to rest a bit

Mrs – sure dear.. you can go outside and catch some air...

the weather is acceptable

Melanie (walking around and talking to nature) – ....

I feel dizzy... and...

lonely.......

I just wish I could simply flout away on a wondrous sleep and forget everything!

(she looks upon a greek sculpture)

.......

Will I find someone decent ? ... the one who’s going to save me from this tedious.... *sigh*

Sincerely, I can’t wait to leave town, since my parents won’t even listen me !

(alot of birds singin’ and flying away)

Aww.. cute.....

If only I could be one of you.....

Butler Jones – humm.. Melanie Ravenswood ??

Melanie – ..........

Yes Jasper

Butler Jones - Your mother is sick worried.

(along with his sister)

Maiden Jones – yes dear.. you should come along inside

Melanie – *sigh* ... but I’ve been here for only...

Butler – thirty minutes and 22 seconds my lady!

Melanie – ... does it matter ?

Maiden Jones – Come dear

( Melanie begins to run over the garden )

Melanie – Catch me if you’re capable! haha

Butler Jones – Miss Melanie!!!

Maiden Jones – not again.....

Melanie – I thought they were smarter this time...

She climbs a wall, which directly leads to town...

Melanie – I REALLY need some air... finally!

( Melanie finds one of her close friends )

Rachel – Melanie !

Melanie – Rachel.. good evening as well

Rachel – Shouldn’t you...

Melanie – NO!... I’m SO fatigated of being locked up in that manor

Always about studies!

Rachel ( laughs ) – I just hope your father won’t get mad at you.. again

Melanie – Oh please ! Rachel, that is my problem

Is really that inconvenient to proclaim some freedom once in a while ?

Rachel – Well.. I understand you...

Melanie – Pleaaase !

Melanie - .....

Rachel – What’s wrong ?

Melanie – Hm nothing... this place...

those times...

Rachel ( laughs ) – yes.. quite indeed

Melanie - ....

Rachel – When you tried to help that boy who had stolen.. what? a jacket?... yes, yes

Ha! I remember, we hide under that bridge just to not get caught !

Melanie – yes....

Rachel – Our parents would never imagine such thing... but soon as they discovered us...

Dear god!

But then.. we were about ten or eleven years old

Melanie – Never heard of him again...

Rachel – what ? that boy ?

Ha! Melanie.. forget it ! He was a thief for crissake!

Melanie – Nevermind...

Rachel – you really need...

hmm

there might be a solution!

Melanie - ??

Explain me

Rachel (grabbing Melanie’s hand) – Come Melanie, I want to introduce you to some friends..

I know exactly where they are by now heh heh

Chris Ballard The Engineer

2007-07-29T15:12:00.000-07:00

Melanie( whispering and being timid ) – Rachel ?? what are you doing ?

There’s a bunch of...

Rachel – Boys !

Friends – RACHEL!!!

Joanne – haha just in time dear ! How have you been ?

Rachel – Very fine indeed ! huh... ?

Where did you get that ?

Greg ( grabbing a bottle of wine ) – hmm the true wonder that god has to offer!

Lilian – That wine is MINE mister!

Greg – NO NO NO... Not until I drink it all !

then, I’ll consider it...

Rachel – Ahaha!

Lilian ( English accent ) – Bloody hell, Gregory ! give it back !

Melanie ( whispering again ) – Can she say that ?

Rachel (yells) – Oh! Humble guests!... This is a sweet dear friend of mine, Melanie !

Friends – hi! .....

Melanie waves at them, looking shy

Joanne – Oh, she’s cute !

Frederic – Isn’t she the mayor’s daughter ?

Rachel – Indeed ! they threat the poor girl like a bird celled in a cage!

Joanne – aw.. that sure ain’t nice

Maria – You want some, (what’s her name).. Melanie ?

Melanie – I don’t drink, thank you....

Maria – You wish.....

Frederic – We just have this fetish to share you know

Friends – ahahahah!

(well... meanwhile our little shy girl is left apart...)

Melanie - ......

Greg – Will you look at the girl we just met.. always quiet

Frederic – quite indeed, my sober companion!

Joanne – Where’s your friend, Rachel ?

Rachel – Oh, now that you ask...

Ah! Melanie ! Come here

Melanie!!

Melanie ignores them and watches the river

Joanne – How odd..

Lilian – like we would care, anyway, when I was walking through that festival and..

Melanie – *sigh*

Our girl is way calm and civilized to handle over that kind of group..

Or so it seemed....

Melanie suddenly hears a beautiful melody... how intriguing...

some young man... singing around.... observing the river as well....

Melanie - .......

Chris – Oh! Excuse me miss If I’m bothering you

Melanie – No... you have a pretty good voice actually (laughs) I’m stunned!

Chris (being timid) – Life inspires me.. hum...

Melanie ( smiles ) – Melanie Ravenswood

Chris – Ravenswood ? then you must be the.....

Melanie ( laughing ) – I beg you, don’t mention it !

Chris ( laughing as well ) – ah don’t worry! Christopher Ballard, a really great pleasure.

I come from the north town

Melanie – You serious ?

Chris – Yes, I’ve moved here which I’m currently planning to be an engineer.

This is a land of opportunities

Melanie – how odd... you seem more like a singer.. a musician perhaps (laughs)

Chris( laughing as well ) – I’m terrible at those !

Joanne – Is that Christopher ??

Maria – Oh.. It sure is... with that girl

Lilian (drinking) – Ah! But not for long

Frederic – And there she goes...

Lilian ( interrupts ) – Chris ! Oh darling, what are you doing here all alone ??

Chris – hm Lilian.... I’m having here an intriguing conversation with this nice....

Lilian – I’ve noticed darling.. all alone......

Chris – If you excuse me, you’re not my girlfriend and I don’t feel comfortable with you constantly calling me...

Melanie ( leaving ) – It’s alright.....

Chris – Melanie.. you’re not going.. ??

Melanie – I must leave... my mother is sick worried

Lilian – ......

Rachel – Melanie dear! I’m coming with you

Frederic – ladies... so imperceptible....Greg… GREGORY! You sure don’t want my wine....

Greg ( looking all dizzy ) – uuuhhhh... don’t come near me with that!

That‘s devil’s gift!

Rachel – Melanie…listen.. I’m sorry for the fact you didn’t get along…

( a huge carriage stops right away in front of Melanie.. Butler Jones is riding it )

Melanie – Father!

Rachel – the mayor…

( The door suddenly opens.. revealing Henry Ravenswood in a really bad temper…)

Henry - .....

Melanie - ....

Henry – get here you little brat!

(pulls her violently into the carriage)

Chris ( whispers to himself ) – How can he be so.. ?

(the others just stare at the scene.. except for Christopher who angrily reacts)

Chris (interfering) – Is that the way you threat your daughter ??
Have shame, sir!

A moment of silence is heard

Joanne (scared) – is he insane ???

Lilian (whispering to herself) – Christopher you f-foolish…

Butler Jones – INSOLENT!!

Henry – Jasper!

..................

Chris - ........

Henry ( psychotic ) – You... you’ll regret it, I assure you that

( everybody’s terrified with the scene )

Henry slams the door and the carriage leaves

Christopher and Melanie (from the window) just kept staring…until she was gone

Henry – I will certainly kill that young parasite!

Melanie - .......

Henry – so...

WHO’S THAT REPUGNANT FRIEND OF YOURS??

ANSWER ME AT ONCE!!

Melanie ( couldn’t take it ) – l-leave me...

Henry – WHAT ???

Melanie – please don’t…

Henry – sorry... WHAT DID YOU SAY ??

Melanie ( couldn't take it ) – I beg you... stop.......

Henry – I RAISED A MONSTER! OUR DEAR ANCESTORS ARE LAUGHING RIGHT NOW AT SUCH CRUDE MOMENT!!

RUNNING AGAIN FROM THE MANSION, I WONDER WHAT’S GOING ON IN THAT MIND!!!

YOU LITTLE GIRL,

FOR YOUR OWN GOOD, IF I EVER SEE YOU DOING ANYTHING......

Melanie ( cries ) – I’M SORRY!!

Henry – ............................

We really have to talk

Joanne – Do you have any idea who were you dealing with ?

Frederic – ahah nevermind them Chris ! we now love you for that

Chris – How could you just stare at such malevolent act…

I can’t understand you, the poor girl…

Joanne – No.. I think you don’t have any sense at all

Maria – you disrespected the mayor, cretin

Frederic ( drunk ) – yes.. he may overreacted but come on... the gentleman here has some courage!

Greg ( drunk as well ) – COURAGE!!!!!

Chris – leave it Frederic! I couldn’t keep watching to that awful scene… blame me if you want to, but I felt sorry for her

I HAD to do something!

Rachel – I think he’s in love.. (gags)

Maria – right, but because of that, we’re now doomed

Rebellion

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Henry – A DESGRACE TO OUR FAMILY!!! She has done it again!

Melanie hears her father’s yelling’s through her room

Henry – SUCH INCOMPETENCE.. BOTH OF YOU!!! I PAY YOU FOR WHAT ???

Tell me!

Butler Jones – please sir forgive us

Mrs Ravenswood – Enough Henry ! You need to calm down already!

Henry goes away

Mrs Ravenswood – I’ll go talk to her…

Mrs Ravenswood – Melanie…can I come in dear ?

Melanie - ......

Mrs Ravenswood – your father in a sort of way is right

But of course…

Melanie – he doesn’t show any respect... keeps humiliating me all the time

Mrs Ravenswood – Do you show any respect for him ? tell me

Melanie - Why should I ?

Mrs Ravenswood – see ? you think that’s acceptable… ?

Indeed he sometimes may....

Melanie ( being frivolous ) – ....would you explain me why do we have to live with this quaint person?

Her mother couldn’t take it and slaps her

Mrs – Melanie Ravenswood! I didn’t raise you to be indecent!

Melanie – .......................

please leave me....

Mrs – .....

Oh honey I love you so much... but please... don’t treat your father the way you threat him

Melanie – leave

Mrs Ravenswood cries and leaves her daughter’s room

( a decent mother would have her daughter grounded )

Mrs – .....Do I really deserve this ?

I don’t.......

meanwhile....

An unseen shadowy figure approaches the manor...

what could it be ?

Melanie (crying as well) – My life is so monotone.. the same old routine everyday

I can’t.... take it...

Some voice interferes in her dialogue

??? – such beauty.. and such tears

Melanie - ???

Everything is too dark

She begins to hear this strange melody

Melanie – That.. that voice... Christopher ??

Chris ( drunk ) – Ha! Good night

Melanie – Christopher !

Chris – WHYY... don’t you come....

..huh... wait....

Melanie – What are you doing here ????

My father will kill you if it sees you here... and in such condition!

Chris – Ha.. don’t you rather come join us ?

Or do you have something already to occupy those times my lady?

Melanie – ...........

wait here

Henry ( in his secretary talking to the phone ) – Yes yes the documents, I’ve already taken care of that....

Remember, my duty here is to bring an immense happiness to my townsfolk people

I don’t want things to settle wrong !

Indeed...

after tomorrow then

Melanie goes downstairs in a hurry.. but suddenly

Henry - Melanie?

Melanie!

Melanie – oh!

Come in father

Henry – I think we need to have a conversation.. if you…

Melanie – now ?

Henry – yes…

I’ve realized how I’ve been overreacting these days.. disrespecting my own daughter in

shameful ways

Melanie - ....

Henry – you Melanie who had always the highest grades in school...

I can’t deny that sure... but dear, are you feeling insecure or ...

Maybe unhappy would be the term....

Melanie - ........

Henry – Well... I’m here always to support you in many ways and.... obstacles...

Yes.. you’re now a woman indeed Melanie

but I do remember... just like yesterday.. when you were an adorable baby..

My sweet Melanie...

Henry hugs her daughter

Henry – SUCH proud , my dear

Melanie – yes......

Henry – go.. go on, to your bedroom where you belong..

I will give it you some, as you mention.... ‘property’

I think I should rest now.. tomorrow I have important measures

Melanie – Yes.. I’ll just go upstairs then, father!

Henry – Good night Melanie! …Melanie!

Melanie ( without mood ) - yes .........

Those were just lies however.. our little girl has decided to leave the manor discretely and join Christopher in the festival

Melanie ( talking to herself ) – Everyone is sleeping at this moment.. a nice opportunity! FINALLY!

meanwhile...

Chris – I’ll... just..... wait.... here

Melanie - CHRIS!!

Chris – AHHHH! LADY!! YOU GAVE ME A HEART ATTACK!!!

Melanie ( laughing ) – shhh! better late than never
Let’s go!

Melanie grabs his hand, as if she was having main control

Melanie – Hm this place looks alright...

Chris – You will love it!

Oh.. here they are

still in good shape huh Frederic ?

Frederic and Gregory stare at them amazed...

Frederic – My god!.... He brought the mayo ….

Chris – Don’t… Let the girl here have some fun my humble friend

Frederic – right…right!

Greg ( drunk ) – Can she dance ? Melanie Let’s dance !

Chris – What about your pair ?

Greg – Huh... what, you mean Lilian ? That crazy wicked temperamental lady ?

Chris – Hmmm Melanie, Shall we.. ?

Melanie ( grabs his hand ) – About time mister!

both dance and give show to the audience

The young couple is admired with their performance

Maria ( Texas accent ) – You can tell by the eyes.. she really likes the guy!

Greg – What do you expect ? being always locked up in that huge house.. I would go crazy

Frederic – But she’s so much better than him.. I envy Chris

Greg - All I have to say he just got lucky... she’s indeed particularly gorgeous

Maria – I won’t deny that

Bizarrely enough.. little shy Melanie becomes like no other

A really extroverted person is revealed among her

Lilian – WHAT ???

Greg – Indeed... she’s a way better dancer than YOU are

Frederic – plus, getting along with everybody.. she keeps surprising us

Lilian – Time to settle things over!

Frederic – Wait!

And there she goes.... again

Lilian ( interfering ) – She ??? Here ??? DARLING!!!

Chris ( drunk ) – ......

shut your mouth woman! OH GOD....

Melanie ( already tired ) – Get lost will ya ? Ahahaha

Lilian ( aggressive ) – Such rude manner! I won’t tolerate that

Chris – Shout! Go away!

Lilian feels embarrassed and leaves

Chris ( stunned ) – I didn’t know that side of yours!

Melanie – We just met today, handsome!

Chris – oh! hahahahah

Melanie ( drunk ) – hmm I must leave...

Chris – Going home.. now ?

Melanie – Yes... you be a gentleman and ..

Chris – Yes.. I’ll walk you home!

Someone is clearly alerted by the presence of the Ravenswood’s daughter... and decides to follow them as they exit

Melanie – .......

Chris – You’re feeling right... right ?

Melanie – fine!

Chris – good

Melanie – to bad Rachel wasn’t there

Chris – Couldn’t come.. but wait until she knows about how amazing you are

Melanie ( ironic ) – She already knows that thank you...

Chris – How long do you know each other ?

Melanie – since when we’re little... ahah

We were at same school... considered best students as well

Chris – hmm surprised...

Melanie – Ha! But you see.. we’re always running during class

We couldn’t take that old teacher of ours

A complete whore she haha

Chris – I imagine.. sometimes I just think we are in the wrong decade

Melanie – Hell.. You won’t imagine how many several punishments I’ve suffered.

just little things... and they judge us

how unfair can that be ?

Chris – Indeed...

Melanie ( smiles ) – Well.. this is it.

Bye Christopher

Chris ( shy ) – huh.. take care Melanie!

Everything worked

Or it seemed....

A strange older man was following the couple all this time around, watching her friend Christopher, as he was leaving the gates of Ravenswood Manor...

nothing happened though

As the little girl enters the mansion... climbs the stairs…

A voice beneath darkness is heard

Butler Jones – Miss Melanie.... still awake in such time ?

Melanie is frightened

Butler Jones – Couldn't sleep? Maybe you're thirsty....

I’ll bring you some fresh water!

Suddenly she alleviates

Melanie – ...... It won’t be necessary...

I think I’m better now Jasper, thank you

Butler Jones – Alright miss, but see If you can get some sleep

Good night Melanie

Melanie - ..... Good night

A new optimistic day was born

The Rodeo

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Melanie is so happy we can’t recognize her depressive character

Henry – Melanie! Did you sleep well ? last night you seemed a bit strange…

Is everything fine ?

Melanie ( quite humoured ) – Amazingly fine!

Henry – Hm.. alright…Would you stay for lunch?

Melanie ( kisses him ) – No time! Love you father!

Henry - ???

She speaks to Mrs Ravenswood who is at table

Melanie – I’m sorry for my selfish acts mother

For all the inconvenience I made!

Mrs – Hm listen Melanie...

You just don’t come here and pretend that anything happened...

Because... that thing of yesterday has really offended me

Melanie – Bye mother!

Mrs - ............

18 years passed and still a child....

Henry ( drinking a cup of tea ) – I wonder..... where’s she going?

Butler Jones – Meet some friend I presume...

Maiden Jones – I’m so worried.. Is she alright ?

Henry – More than alright it seems...

Melanie leaves her manor... singing with her harmonic timber and collecting roses

Her friend Rachel awaits near the gates

Rachel – Melanie! You’re looking gorgeous!

Melanie – Rachel! What a surprise!

Rachel – I just came here to warn you dear.. your little ‘friend’ is participating in a rodeo

Melanie – Christopher ?? I didn’t know that side of him!

Rachel – Now you know ( laughs )

He asked us to join him.. as I know, you were quite terrific last night

Melanie – Did he actually say that?

Rachel – Indeed! This early morning before he went..

But tell me… since when do you have permission to go outside the manor ? like now

Melanie – Heh! I just invented an excuse... all I really wanted to do was...

Rachel – Where were you going anyway ? hm..

I know! You wanted to see him...

Melanie ( timid ) - ...... what ? WHAT are you referring ??

Rachel – Ah! Nothing... nothing ordinary.... sure I’m glad I came!

Melanie – so so… Let’s go to that rodeo festival then !

No time to loose!

Youngsters from all regions are competing for best rider reputation...

Melanie – Such crowd! Will we find him Rachel, in such... ??

Rachel – hmm not sure.. Oh!

He’s over there, can you see him ??

Melanie – Where??

Oh!

CHRISTOPHER!!!

Chris – Ladies! Melanie! I’m glad you’ve came

Melanie waves, being all shy

Chris – So .. ready to observe my performance ?

Rachel – Well those gentleman are quite good riding those wild animals!

Melanie ( smiles ) – When it’s your turn Chris ?

Chris – It will be soon I hope

Voiceover – Ladies & Gentleman, Here within you.. the legendary BROWN HAWK!!!!!!!

Chris – Oh.. my turn!

Melanie ( laughs ) – Brown hawk? HOW original can that be!

Chris – Let’s go!

Melanie/Rachel – Careful Christopher!

Melanie - !!! He’s quite amazing!!!!!!

Rachel – No words can describe it.. he has talent!

Oh! Melanie I must go, I’m late!

Melanie – Whaat ? don’t leave me here with this people!

Rachel – Sorry dear! Important measures

Melanie – Sheeesh.. sounds like my dad!

The audience went enthusiastic with his magnificent moves...

Until finally, it falls from the horse

( recovers nevertheless )

Christopher Ballard waves at the public

Voiceover – He once again has triumphed!!!! Such incredible movements towards the wild beast!!!!

Melanie – Is he alright??? My god!

Few moments later...

Chris – Melanie.. I was born to do this kind of thing! Haha

Melanie – Well.. for instances you kept me worried... I think

You sure are crazy

Chris – A little bit..

Melanie – Is it me or that horse seems to like you ?

Chris – Indeed! But I just met him.. today!

Melanie – A fetish for animals may I say ?

Chris – Well.. I show respect for them...

Melanie – hmmm

Suddenly a rider appears between

Frank – You were quite good brother!

Chris – Thanks! You did as well a nice presentation!

Frank – I suppose so, hmm may I say.. who’s this charming young woman ?

Chris – A friend of mine.. come.. Melanie, Frank Ballard my older brother

Frank.. Melanie Ravenswood!

Frank – Ravenswood ? Such respected name in a place like this!

Melanie – I guess...

Frank – My brother here is ashamed of what he just did yesterday.. being indecent at our own mayor

Chris – Let's just say I overreacted..

Melanie – No.. not a problem indeed.. actually my father deserves a lot more than that

Frank - ??

Melanie – ..........

As long as I’m here he will not harm Christopher..

Frank – A strange way to think madam!

Chris – ....

I behaved very wrongly Melanie...

Melanie – ?? Did you see how violent he was that day ?

Frank – Hmm I like this girl... You’re different...

.. and quite rebellious...

Chris – Want to go for a ride Melanie ? I’ll take you home

Frank – Careful younger brother... The horse doesn’t appeal....

Melanie – Are you kidding? You just rode him once

That thing is not domesticated

Chris – You’re safe with me... I DEAL with everything!

Melanie - ........

The horse violently rises

Melanie - !!!

See?? Definitely not a smart idea!

Chris – I insist! haha

Melanie – NO! CHRIS!!!!!!!!

WOOOOHOOOOO

Melanie suddenly changes her attitude and enjoys the ride

Frank – Christopher...

Frank Ballard walks in another direction

SCENE 3: BIZARRE

2007-07-29T12:50:00.000-07:00

Chris – Are you enjoying it????

Melanie – HEEE HAAAAWWW!!!!!!!!!

Chris – My hears!

As soon as the young pair arrives, the wild animal is freed and runs away

Chris – Well... this is it

Melanie – Indeed... want to go for a walk Christopher ?

Chris – If you say so... But I’m afraid that your father sees me...

Melanie – I sincerily can’t believe it! You who completely dominated that horse...

And still afraid of my dad ?

Chris - .....

Quite a beautiful garden you have there.

Melanie - ......

Yes Chris.. gracious indeed

Hmmm

Catch me!

Melanie pushes her young pair kindly and then runs away

Chris ( laughs ) – Why did you do that? You’re gonna get it lady!

An innocent... romantic chase is made

(Dance of the Hours)

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TNWVYT-yltY

00:00 to 03:22

??? - Melanie!!

Melanie - !

Someone is calling my name!

Chris – Oh! I must go then!

Melanie - ... Wait! Don’t... go....

Chris – Melanie, I had such great time... sorry! Will you still accept my offer ?

Melanie – I was having such great time...

.... ?? Offer?

( realizes )

That...

y-you were only.... kidding...

correct?

Chris – ....

You can always consider! Must go now

And we wonder.... what offer ?

Christopher runs just in time before her butler arrives at scene

Jasper Jones – Melanie!!!

Melanie - .... what is it Jasper ??

Jasper – Here you are! Your father.... come!

Melanie ( worried ) – Huh... what?? About what??

Henry Ravenswood appears to be with some gentlemen in his secretary

Melanie - ........

Henry - .........

Melanie – You called me....

An older man near her father is quite recognizable... It was the one at the bar that night....

Henry – You may leave... Melanie you stay

They abandon the room... seems that Henry has changed his mood for no good

Henry – You.. didn’t....

Melanie – what??

Henry ( slams the table ) – DON’T TALK TO ME IN THAT VOICE!!!

YOU LISTEN CAREFULLY YOUNG PEST..

Melanie - ......

Henry – Have you no notion at all ? You were at lucky nugget’s bar last night didn’t you??

Melanie....

Did I... gave you permission to go outside... last night ?

Melanie – w-wait....

Henry – DID I??????

Melanie - .......

Henry – No! And today you seemed strange... way strange indeed young girl... you just disappeared this instance..... say
Where did you go?? to that bar again I presume???

Melanie – N-Nowhere...

Henry – Your mother doesn’t know anything about this....

It would be a tremendous shock...

Melanie – Alright! To that rodeo festival!

Henry - ......... Just now.... minutes ago.......

Melanie - ........

Henry – you realize.. those are repugnant... savage.... mindless people

You went with who may I ask??

Melanie – Friends....

Henry – What friends??
.

Melanie – Leave me father!

I got your fact already!

Henry – The fact is your GROUNDED!

BEGONE!!!!!!

Melanie goes to her room and cries.. desperately

Melanie – ... I am so tired...

She looks upon her ring...

Melanie – Christopher.... you’re being serious ?

( throws it ) silly!!!!!

I don’t know you well, to accept such thing!

but then... this could be an opportunity to leave town...

NO! We just met yesterday, for cry out loud!!

Seems that Christopher proposed her in wedding by offering his ring...

True passion... or plain stupidity ?

Immaturity perhaps...

Her mother couldn’t hear her screams...

Mrs – Melanie...... what’s wrong ??

Melanie - ........

Mrs – I’ve failed as a mother.. since I can’t bring you any happiness...

I must say... ( cries )

I am a failure.....

She hugs Melanie

Mrs – You are a fantastic girl.... this isn’t more than a bad transition honey....

You’ll be very happy.. by every necessary needs....

Melanie - ...........

Mrs – sorry.....

Mrs Ravenswood leaves

Voices are heard

Maiden Jones – everything alright miss??

Mrs Ravenswood simply cries in despair...

Melanie ( looking at her window ) – Christopher.......

Tell me you’re being serious about this.....

( cries ) p-pleaase......

Strange Affair

2007-07-29T12:03:00.000-07:00

All of sudden...

Harmonic and tranquil landscapes....

Laughs are the only thing we hear.. as we’re witnessing beauty

Further more... It appears there’s occurring a jovial picnic...

Christopher is seeing in a cowboy hat.. playing guitar accompanied by his wonderful timber..

Melanie is purely enchanted and embraces him…

Seems they’re engaged as well...

Just the two... without anyone to disrupt their peaceful stay....

Or so they thought.....

The smile on their rosey faces has suddenly vanished... as the young pair senses a disquieting inquietude

A 7 foot long rattlesnake is right near at her husband

!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

The menagerie of fire ants, insects and snakes starts to devour Melanie’s fiance...

alive....

Melanie just watches horrified to the scene

Melanie - !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

The young woman desperately tries to recover her groom's body from the hungry parasites....

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRGGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH

Melanie ( screaming out loud ) – NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
........

... all this time........

Maiden Jones – Melanie! What is it ???

Melanie – Nothing...... ordinary....

Maiden Jones – Don’t fright us like that honey!

Anna Jones leaves

Melanie ( crying ) – N-no.... I must warn Christopher!!!

This seemed way real for a dream... something terrible will happen to him!!

Melanie soon realizes

Melanie - Father!

MORE TO COME.......